SUPPORT JUDGMENTS WITH SPECIFIC INFORMATION
from Life on the Mississippi
by Mark Twain
And the boat is rather a handsome sight, too.
She is long and sharp and trim and pretty; she has two tall, fancy-topped
chimneys, with a gilded device of some sort swung between them; a fanciful
pilothouse, all glass and "gingerbread," perched on top of the "texas"
deck behind them; the paddle boxes are gorgeous with a picture or with
gilded rays above the boat's name; the boiler deck, the hurricane deck,
and the texas deck are fenced and ornamented with clean white railings;
there is a flag flying gallantly from the jack staff....
from Lord Jim by Joseph Conrad
His skipper had come up noiselessly, in pyjamas and with
his sleeping-jacket flung wide open. Red of face, only half awake, the
left eye partly closed, the right staring stupid and glassy, he hung his
big head over the chart and scratched his ribs sleepily. There was something
obscene in the sight of his naked flesh. His bared breast glistened soft
and greasy as though he had sweated out his fat in his sleep. He pronounced
a professional remark in a voice harsh and dead, resembling the rasping
sound of a wood-file on the edge of a plank; the fold of his double chin
hung like a bag triced up close under the hinge of his jaw. Jim started,
and his answer was full of deference; but the odious and fleshy figure,
as though seen for the first time in a revealing moment, fixed itself in
his memory for ever as the incarnation of everything vile and base that
lurks in the world we love....
SUPPORT JUDGMENTS DIRECTLY. The direct method
of supporting judgments or opinions is a natural in speaking or writing:
the judgment comes first. You might say to someone, "That's
a sweet boat." They might then ask, "What do you mean by sweet?"
You would then supply the details that define or account for you opinion
of the boat. This whole-to-part organization of an idea or image has many
advantages for both you and your reader. In order to state a judgment first,
you must have thought through your topic beforehand. Your reader
has an immediate overview of the topic--he only has to watch closely as
you fill in the supporting details.
UNFOLD YOUR JUDGMENTS. The direct method
of supporting judgments is close to the deductive process of thinking
in that the conclusion comes first and is followed by supporting details.
By contrast, the unfolding method is similar to the inductive process
of thinking, for the details come first and lead to a conclusion.
The Conrad selection illustrates this method--Conrad's judgment comes at
the end, preceded by a series of vivid details which are carefully arranged
which lead the reader naturally to the conclusion.
ASSIGNMENT. Assume that someone whom you've
never seen before shows up at your church on Sabbath. By observing their
appearance and mannerisms, you will form an opinion about them. You notice
at the outset that they are dressed somewhat different from others in the
church, and you feel somewhat leery of them. Yet, the person has a pleasant
face and seems very friendly; a snap judgment doesn't seem warranted.
In one paragraph, write a description
of the person's appearance and behavior during church. Make it sufficiently
detailed to support your judgment. Place your general statement at the
beginning or end--wherever it will be most effective.